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Although alliterations always add an alluring angle,
Before blindly bringing borrowed blessings,
Carefully construct clean clear criticisms.

Don't desparately drive disproportionate definitions.
Each explanation exiting effortlessly eastwards,
For freely flowing forces frantically fumble forward.

Great gratitude grows graciously,
Hopefully having heartfelt happiness.
Incidentally, in internal increments,
Justifying joyous jealousy judiciously.

Kings know kohlrabi knives kill kneeling kinsmen,
Lovingly lamenting loyalties lost, like leaves.
Mindless, manic, make-believe mirrormen make more mess,
Never needing notice, news networks
Or openness; oblong oranges open outwards.

Preparedness proves perserverance pays pitifully,
Quietly quickening quite quaintly.
Respect recent, revolving, random resolutions,
So superficial splendour supplies sanguine sleep.

To tongue toyingly, tasteless tunes,
Underneath ubiquitous, uniform underlings,
Vying vehemently, venomously, viciously,
While wonders will weakly wreck worryful words.

Xenogenes xerensise, xeroxing xylopyrograhy xerotically,
Yo-yoing yesterdays yarns youthfully.
Zoetropes zigzag zestily; zoned.
©2004-2009 ~vurtual
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Well it's finished. I've had to compromise more that I wanted to on the "X" and "Z" lines, but that was to be expected. Thanks to ~dark-dear-heart for inspiration.
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Fun! You gonna do the whole alphabet?

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I'm gonna try!!!!!!!

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Well, I wish you good luck, and eagerly await the outcome. If you have trouble, I'm sure you can get a lot of helpful suggestions from the dA community.

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Wow, looks like it's coming along great! You've forced your imagination to work in a really rigid limitation, (which is ironic considering the poem's title) and it's paid off. Some of these lines, besides being clever and amusing, are also very meaningful. My favorites are the "L" and "J" lines. So far, it's really fun to read out loud... and it looks like you're having a lot of fun writing it, too.

So you only have XYZ to go... you know, the greek alphabet ends at "O"...

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Yeah, I was very happy with "L". "X" is a toughie, but I'll be reaching for the dictionary soon. It's a shame to have to revert to it, since I've managed to surprise myself with avoiding it so far.

As for the irony, all I can say is it's pretty much the point.

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ok wow...that was a trip and a half, not only for my vocabulary, but my eyes and mouth. It was terrific fun to read that aloud! I am utterly impressed.

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I saw another alphabet poem somewhere around here, but that one just used one letter for one word at a time.

You show a great deal of skill with your little experiment, unfortunately this is just one of those poems that crashes my brain and drives me nuts while reading. That and it's two in morning here.

"Mindless, manic, make-believe mirrormen make more mess"

That was cool line. I'll probably see it when I go to writers hell :lmao:
Bloody hell, this must have taken you ages. Fav. I like a new, if slightly satirical exploration of a narrative device or poetic concept. Nice one.

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